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Burs başvuru mektubumda hata varmı yokmu bakabilirmisinz? [ingilizce]
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Burs başvuru mektubumda hata varmı yokmu bakabilirmisinz? [ingilizce]
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Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Tevfik Aykanat from Turkey. I am the eldest child in my family. Even as a child learning new languages was so much fun for me. When I started in Middle school the time where we were going to learn English I was already on the intermediate level. I have graduated from Fatih Sultan Mehmet High school in 2014 as a foreign language student. I always knew having multiple connections with different people would benefit me, therefore, I was president of our school council. I have used my free time to meet people from different countries to have a general idea about other cultures which led me to China and Chinese literature. I was in love with ‘’ Romance of the Three Kingdoms’’ , I used it as my summer essay project and I translated it from English to Turkish. At that point, I was having so much fun reading novels that I tried to write my own novels. It is still on the amateur level but I intend to write my own novel that I hope will be a masterpiece. After graduating from High school, I did gap two years. The reasons I did was so I can have work experience, see the real world and have some experience so I can shape my novel. I have traveled around Turkey working as a Tourist Guide. I had faced many challenges, hardships but it was a good experience and I have matured as a person added to that I had many connections with people from different countries. One of the biggest things I have discovered was the language barrier between the Turkey and China. Turkey is a developing country which is in need of many products And China is known for its determined work with a very reasonable price. I believe it’s not enough and we have a lot to learn from people of china. I plan to pursue my dream of writing a novel that people will one day call a masterpiece and use my Chinese knowledge to support the trading connections between my country and China. I would like to put a lot of effort in my first year of my studies. In my second year, I would like to start my own work with the supervision of my teachers. In my third year, I would like to focus on graduation and get the best scores make the final arrangements for my life after college. I have a competitive spirit so I think will be on top of my class. I am a very hard working person. I hope will do my best in everything. I believe this program will help me greatly with what I want to accomplish. I hope that I can gain more experience with people and in life which will be of a great help in my future career. After Graduation, I plan to work in a major multi-national company that has potential or already working with both China and Turkey. With my knowledge from both countries, I will be of great use in this kind of job. In the meantime, I will be creating my masterpiece novel as I think it requires a great amount of time and experience in different parts of life. After years of working I want to help younger people in my current situation, the young generation that wants to study in China or Turkey, to accomplish this, my dream is to attend a university in China. I hope one day I can teach in a Chinese university. |
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It am still on amateur level but I intend to write my own novel that I hope will be a masterpiece. I'm still an amateur at this point but I dream about writing a novel which would be a masterpiece. Şeklinde ifade edersen daha düzgün olur diye düşünüyorum. Türkçe düşününce yukarıdaki cümle mantıklı geliyor ama kendi romanımı yazmayı planlıyorumla, roman yazmayı planlıyorum ingilizce de çok farklı anlaşılır. Intend yerine dream about kullandım daha uygun geldi bana. Intend yine fazla türkçe kaçtı sanki. Gerisini okuyamadım yoldayım ama bakacağım :) |
Bu mesaja 1 cevap geldi.
doğrudur hocam yabancı arkadaşlarıma gösterdiğimde hep ingilizceye farklı bakıyon diyolar hala (türkçe bakıyosun diyemiyolar türkçe bilmediklerinden  ) |
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Even as a child learning new languages was so much fun for me. When i started in Middle school the time where we were going to learn English I was already on intermediate level.
I have graduated from Fatih Sultan Mehmet High school in 2014 as a foreign language student.
I always knew Having multiple connections with different people would benefit me therefore i was president of our school council. I have used my free time to meet people from different countries to have a general idea about other cultures which led me to
China and Chinese literature. I was in love with ‘’ Romance of the Three Kingdoms’’
,I used it as my summer essay project and I translated it from English to Turkish.
At that point I was having so much fun reading novels that i tried to write my own novels.
It am still on amateur level but I intend to write my own novel that I hope will be a masterpiece.
After graduating from High school ,i did gap two year.
The reasons I did was so I can have work experience, see the real world and have some experience so I can shape my novel. I have travelled around Turkey working as a Tourist Guide.
I had faced many challenges, hardships but it was a good experience and I have matured as a person added to that I had many connections with people from different countries. One of the biggest thing I have discovered was the language barrier between the Turkey and China. Turkey is a developing country which is in need of many products And China is known for its determined work with a very reasonable price. I believe it’s not enough and we have a lot to learn from people of china.
I plan to pursue my dream of writing a novel that people will one day call a masterpiece and use my Chinese knowledge to support the trading connections between my country and China. I would like to put a lot of effort on my first year of my studies. In my second year I would like to start my own work with the supervision of my teachers. In my third year I would like to focus on graduation and get the best scores make the final arrangements for my life after college.
I have a competitive spirit so I think will be on top of my class. I am a very hard working person. I hope will do my best in everything. I believe this program will help me greatly with what I want to accomplish. I hope that i can gain more experience with people and in life whish will be of a great help in my future career.
After Graduation, I plan to work in a major multi-national company that has potential or already working with both China and Turkey. With my knowledge from both countries I will be on great use in this kind of job. In the meantime, I will be creating my masterpiece novel as I think it requires great amount of time and experience in different parts of life. After years of working I want to help younger people in my current situation, the young generation that wants to study in China or Turkey, to accomplish this ,my dream is to attend a university in China. I hope one day I can teach in a Chinese university.
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